Kippo

[Calvin "Freckle" McMurray]

Your character's full name: Kippo Shilala
Age: 16 in years
Species: River Otter
Gender: Male
Allegiance: Good
Appearance:

Kippo has a dirty tan coat with no notable injuries. His body is barely protected by a tunic with baggy pants, covering his apperance of a runners body with a strong lower body. He was born with chipped ear.

Belongings:

His primary weapon is his 2 dirks, followed by throwing daggers, and then a bag of tricks.

Job or Position:

More of an all-around person, perfers a ranger.

Personality:

HIs personality is more of a excited young dibbun, but has the combat prowness of a seasoned warrior due to his random, unorthedox means of defating an enemy. im freindlier groups, he likes to flirt around with females of his kind a bit, and watch as someone gets drunk on october ale with a mug in hand. With fellow comrades, he normally provines"sunshine on a cloudy day" with his humor. Rumors have spread that he made a cat laugh as a joker, which he subsucuently deserted to run from its vengence.

History and Background Information:

His father and mother were Shippo and Kilala, respectively(yes it is from Inuyasha, i like the names). When he was a dibbun, he watched his father go fight often, and yet wondered what it was like to fight. At the age of 12, he ran from home in effort to escape an enemy, only suviving by stabbing the eye of his pursuer with the blade of his newfownd dirk. At age 15, he was almost killed by a blood enraged badger, then later became self-declared ruler of a stone somewhere in Mossflower

Any other details:

un-married, no kids(you never know), afraid of the word NI.

[jack]

I would make the history longer to make more sense. The personality is pretty good. I would fix it up though. I think that the all around person is a great idea. You should make his appearance longer. The belongings are not redwall like at all. The sword I think is okay though. The crystal case and thrower are not.

[Calvin "Freckle" McMurray]

NOW MODIFIED

[jack]

I know but you can not have the things in a list. All in paragraph form.

[Aalai]

There are no boars in the Redwall world, and as Blue said it needs to all be in paragraph form, and most sections need to be at least four lines long(for Appearence and personality)

[Calvin "Freckle" McMurray]

I modified it

[Calvin "Freckle" McMurray]

BAD SPELLING FOR BOAR, SHOULD BE BEAR

[Bark Snowfur]

It looks to me as if its in a list form. It needs to have some sentence flow and structer and not just a list.

[Calvin "Freckle" McMurray]

Now changed(again...)

[Bark Snowfur]

Appearance is good but the history and personality still need more sentence flow.

[Exia]

Hooray! I'm not the only n00b/ IY fan here! Looks pretty good.

[Aalai]

Approved.