Post by jack on Nov 17, 2007 15:57:32 GMT -5
I know that it is short and you probably hate it and think it is bad. Well this is the first chapter of the book I am writing. I am trying a new writing style and short chapters but lots of them.
This story takes place in that time when we had cannons and one shot guns. But in this story is not about that. This story is about much more. It was on the far northern coast. The Death Pearl was going to catch her prey. The Lord of it second in command from Lutra was rapping out orders. "Raise the sail higher. Hoist the colors. Roll out the guns, load the ballistas. Go and get Flitch,"Lord Cran (for that was the lord)told a crew member. The crew member nodded. He was not an ordinary crew member. For he was not human, he was another race that no one knows what is exactly, but this race is known as elites. He looked inhuman in his strange armor with his strange gun. (An elite looks like a regular human with pure silver armor on. This armor is in plates and they have a helmet that is not regular it is shaped differently. The gun an elite carries shoots energy bolts not bullets.) This elite was one that was fairly close to Flitch. He went down below deck and to where Flitch was. "Sir the Lord wants you,"He told Flitch in his robotic sounding voice.(If you have ever saw star wars then you would know this voice is the same kind that the clones have). Flitch just nodded and shouldered his bow. He got up ignoring the elite as he went up on deck. "Take out their mast," Lord Cran ordered to Flitch. Flitch nodded once again for he rarely spoke. He stared at the other ships mast and it blew up. For Flitch was one of the last of the a race known as the Blue Snakes. He was the only one ever to have mind powers. When most looked at the 16 year old Blue Snake when he was in human form were shocked. He wore a simple tan tunic with leather boots. Flitch stood on Lord Cran's left and the captain of the elites on his left. The Death Pearl was almost neck in neck with the ship it was chasing.
This story takes place in that time when we had cannons and one shot guns. But in this story is not about that. This story is about much more. It was on the far northern coast. The Death Pearl was going to catch her prey. The Lord of it second in command from Lutra was rapping out orders. "Raise the sail higher. Hoist the colors. Roll out the guns, load the ballistas. Go and get Flitch,"Lord Cran (for that was the lord)told a crew member. The crew member nodded. He was not an ordinary crew member. For he was not human, he was another race that no one knows what is exactly, but this race is known as elites. He looked inhuman in his strange armor with his strange gun. (An elite looks like a regular human with pure silver armor on. This armor is in plates and they have a helmet that is not regular it is shaped differently. The gun an elite carries shoots energy bolts not bullets.) This elite was one that was fairly close to Flitch. He went down below deck and to where Flitch was. "Sir the Lord wants you,"He told Flitch in his robotic sounding voice.(If you have ever saw star wars then you would know this voice is the same kind that the clones have). Flitch just nodded and shouldered his bow. He got up ignoring the elite as he went up on deck. "Take out their mast," Lord Cran ordered to Flitch. Flitch nodded once again for he rarely spoke. He stared at the other ships mast and it blew up. For Flitch was one of the last of the a race known as the Blue Snakes. He was the only one ever to have mind powers. When most looked at the 16 year old Blue Snake when he was in human form were shocked. He wore a simple tan tunic with leather boots. Flitch stood on Lord Cran's left and the captain of the elites on his left. The Death Pearl was almost neck in neck with the ship it was chasing.